Need Help In My Poem/Poetry Grammar

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  1. Hey friends, recently I had make a poem/poetry(I don't really know the difference between poem and poetry), this is in english, as with my english is really bad, I need help from those who have a good grammar to help me fix it.

    For the poem itself, I can't post it here, I'm to embarrased. So if anyone is willingly to help me, I will appreciate it.

    Warning do not read the spoiler below if you don't like to read someone vent.

    Spoiler
    This is a poem dedicated to my mother, I had a miserable fight with her a while ago, that brought so many tears, especially in me, yeah you can call me a sissy boy, but today is really worst. I feel betrrayed by her, I always though she loves me, she care me most, but in the end she chosen something else over me, even though she's not explicitly say it, but I know it! Actually my eyes still blurry right now while I typing this..  I feel like I don't deserve to live anymore, I even attempt to suicide, I can't help it, my own mother, the very existence that I love most yet I believe she also loves me, can't fully chose me over something else. When I lost a girlfriend  a long time ago, it was hurt, but this time, I feel like my head want to explodes. To be honest I still don't know what should I do, Im slowly begin to hate her, if I remember her face, my tears slowly coming out. Yeah I'm a patethic boy. With this poem I wrote I hope she know that I was really2 sad right now.
    I will PM the Poem for you who want to help with the grammar.

    Many thanks.

    EDIT : I forgot to add tags -__-