Is this too confusing?

Lately I've been discussing with team members about changing the first sequence of events. For those of you who have played it is it confusing, boring or a little to normal? (I know the grammar is bad.)

Sequence 2

Whats the new idea? Well I think that it should playout with Daina waking up Clarence and progress the day. The next day instead of Fullmin coming along looking for a child, Dubay comes to you with an urgent request. The food supply is going to run severely low and he wants you to go on a hunt with him. On your way you find a factory, something you and he have never seen. Out of curiosity they decide to investigate. They explore the outer rim of the bleak and depressing factory. Soon they are beckoned by Evangeline, a lady on a quest to steal food back from these people. It turns out that these people are Zeldons the protectors of the world. They have been hording food and her plan is to get it back from them to teach them a lesson. Don't mess with the people. Thus commences infiltration and to Dainas birthday.

Or the original

The original in which you follow suit the day and meet Daina in Skyview. Then commences the day until the next day Fullmin a traveler comes to ask you for help. He is searching for a child and thus begins a search for a child, this leads to the factory and a similar situation until the birthday.

What do you think? Which sounds better?

I'll vote for sequence 2. Original one sounds boring. Plus 2 one is interesting and love scenes like that.

Will try the game when I meet the time.

I agree with Zalett, Sequence 2 drew my attention even more.

Voted to keep this. 

Well it looks like the majority likes the second sequence. So it shall be so, votes are over as of now.

It's buried deep in the forest... far away from the town. Sure they've seen the smoke, but they never ventured far enough to find it.

Thanks for reminding me.. I need to add in a little explanation in game.

For refrence