Can someone please tell me if my video game writing is good or not?

So, i am a designer but i recently put effort into writing since design these days is a hybrid of design and writing.

My programmer for the game is often saying my writing is lacking while my part time artist says it great.

Could you please tell me if i am doing well or not? Since i can't format to save my life i'll send you a mediafire link.

Thank you all for viewing this thread!

*NOTE* IT IS NOT WRITTEN LIKE A NOVEL!!!

http://www.mediafire.com/?mnbnbcg5q4abs3w

Hi Stroke9

I'm no writer, but I'm guessing that's more of a screenplay style. The story certainly intrigues me and makes me want to know what happens next. There are a few spelling mistakes, but I've always been picky about that kind of thing, so it's no big deal. Was your programmer more specific about why your writing was lacking? About the only thing that I could pick up on was that the setting of the visuals was a bit vague i.e. colours and textures. Unless that was intentional. Again, I'm no writer, so this is just my opinion. Hope this helps.

Yeah it is rather vague on visuals, sorry about that i write accompanying docs for that.

Thanks for the input, as for the programmer he said it lacked strutcure which is very true :(

The premise of the story and the writing itself isn't bad, but as a programmer in training myself, I would just say it needs more detail so that it's absolutely clear how you want things to move and play out on screen. I'd be very interested to see how this story will turn out. It's a good piece of work.

Is this going to be put together in Ace or another engine?

In ace, but its being modded to an atb Zelda style gameplay.